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Ahh! Shem Creek

My inner light quickens in pure delight!
The ecstasy of all our visceral senses, high
wakes chest with Dearheart, sharing His sight,
Besotted distraction Dearheart’ and Shem Creek, nigh.
Feeling pallid, radiant grasses as sunsets, longing
ease and feeling home, tangerine puddles bloom.
Radiant grasses hypnotic colors light keeps changing!
Sun pacing sky, sailboat docked, ship-shaped boom.
Oh, nightly staring Dearheart’, with Shem Creek my final part,
No blinking, two sides, besotted awe, sight flourishes.
dark ensues, climatic miracle a living Work of Art!
Humbled we seat, as maître d’ tasty goods’ nourishes.

Paintings on the sweet grass, all hues discovered.
Dearheart’ face, Shem’s Creek final place, love recovered.

References: Shem Creek, Mount Pleasant, SC is a location.
Dear Heart; dearheart is a term of highest esteem. ie, Urban Dictionary.
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  1. September 16, 2011 at 5:58 pm

    i have read your verse…need to look up the refs and think on it a bit before i give you any feedback…but onmy way to grab my boys…so be back in a bit but wanted you to knowi was here…smiles.

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  2. September 16, 2011 at 9:58 pm

    ok, i think you probably need a process note on dear heart and Shem…is it the epistle of Shem…was not familiar and looked it up…could work did not read the whole epistle…there is some nice lines in here, it tis the repeat of the ref which gives it weight that i am unsure of…

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  3. September 16, 2011 at 10:38 pm

    These are some yummy lines:

    “The ecstasy of all our visceral senses, high”
    “tangerine puddles bloom”
    “all hues discovered”

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  4. September 17, 2011 at 8:34 am

    I enjoyed this immensely. I did need a couple of readings to sort the rhythms out in my own mind – not a criticism, rather the reverse: I appreciated the variety of rhythm. In fact the structure generally. The changes of meter I thought were handled supremely well. This is something I always find very difficult to manage. Finally, there are the unusual and thought-provoking phrases: besotted awe; Besotted distraction; radiant grasses etc, etc.

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