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Hideway

Let us hideaway where our passions link,               

Let us never harden like those in the city.               

Turning from all self and necessity.                          

Without passion our hearts will sink.                        

Holding each other with love and passion.               

Passion is all that is reality for us now,                     

Anything else will be a permanent scowl.                      

Do not fall for the coldness of fashion.                       

Live in fullness and you are admired.                                                                                 

I cannot live, this may sound mundane.                     

Living in the quiet no noise not even a tone.                   

Your lover, your lady to be, is all inspired.                                                                                       

Finish in this world without passion, am I insane.                                                                                         

Having everything else in life, I am not alone                                

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  1. September 14, 2012 at 5:08 am

    good to live love and life in general with passion…our hearts need this..i agree..

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  2. September 14, 2012 at 5:39 am

    lovely sonnet!

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  3. September 14, 2012 at 7:23 am

    Ah the cold and heat of love

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  4. September 14, 2012 at 11:01 am

    wow….passion is a good thing but is there a point where it burns so bright we gutter….ha like the bit of crazy there in the end as well…nice dance to your words…

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  5. September 14, 2012 at 3:41 pm

    Yes..the form is the Petrarchan sonnet in rhyme scheme. Line lengths varied here and not iambic but fluid. Many are ten syllables, but that isn’t ruling. The ideas flow line to line and I like the way you insert reason and personality throughout the poem. It’s as though this is the argument for a move away from the city to an idyllic setting for two – away from distractions, in nature, to keep love alive! A good use of the sonnet form!

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    • September 14, 2012 at 8:31 pm

      Thank you so much for the critique. I so appreciate your keeping me inside the forms.
      Everyone needs and objective reader, esp a writer like yourself! Thank you so much!

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  6. September 25, 2012 at 2:34 am

    hey you….hope you are well…welcome back…smiles…

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