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What?

All vain

All insane

 

Meaning inane

Useless pain

 

All vain

All insane

 

Incompetent

Or

Intelligent

 

It does matter

Or

Of course,

Maybe not.

 

tener cojones

I need cajole

 

Bust or not

Cussed

Or cursed

Unknown.

 

  1. March 4, 2013 at 3:54 am

    what encouragement do you need?

    wont claim to understand it as much as i feel it.

    smiles.

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  2. March 4, 2013 at 4:44 am

    ps good to see you, its been a while

    smiles.

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  3. March 4, 2013 at 5:04 am

    ha…nice play with words and allit here sharon

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  4. March 4, 2013 at 5:11 am

    I like the short lines, the spacing for extra breath. Nice use of contradiction. The doubt and unsure footing of the voice is palpable. Very honest words; no BS. I love to visit seasides. The sea brings back focus. COuldn’t live on one full time though. Too many tides. I get that. This piece was liked pulled back and forth. The word OR used a lot. Effective to convey confliction. The only line I question is that pain is useless. But its probably personal preference. Excellente write. I enjoyed the passion and truth of its expression. Thanks for visiting my site and reading my lil poemish verse. Look forward to more of your work.

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  5. March 4, 2013 at 5:52 am

    There is a feeling of push and pull in this…a back and forth in the mind. A nicely paired down write.

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  6. March 4, 2013 at 12:33 pm

    Meaning inane

    Useless pain

    Great line. Nice write.

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  7. March 4, 2013 at 4:26 pm

    ..to be or not to be?? kind of like there are two sides to every coin;)nice..

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  8. March 4, 2013 at 7:15 pm

    pretty cool. I like the writing down the page aspect here, the spacing between the sets, the overt rhythm works really well, and nice insertion of the spanish. Nicely done. Thanks

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